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thanks everybody for joining us here
Notice : nobody had paid his registering fees yet
let's begin
I'd like to talk about an important matter which might be important for many people who wants to immigrate , I'd made a topic about It before , but no body replied on me in spite of it's importance , so I hope that you will enter and give us your opinion
Immigration and consequences of raising your children in a western country
this is really the most worrying matter for me when i'm thinks in the immigration , our children will be raised in a western society which tradition's completely differs from our eastern and islamic traditions , how could we protect our children there . and how could we teach them the real islamic morals . how could we support them to face the external effects .
how could we make them love our religion despite the absence of the well being model and the intensive attack and defacement against islam and the eastern valuables
what will you had to do if you noticed that you son or daughter's manners gets worst
and worst
when will you reach the "non returning point" when you can't control your people and then they're completely lost
if you made a great effort and could controlled the first generation (your sons ) how could you guarantee that your sons will make the same effort with their sons
what is the percentage of the succeeded cases of sons who raised in western countries and still tied by their father's religion and customs
the discussion board is opened
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Mr Dabash
Here are the first two sentences of your essay.
The green paragraphs correct the spelling mistakes. The red ones are “my way” of saying things. Last but not least, comments are indicated in black.
Regards
I'd like to talk about an important matter which might be important for many people who wants to immigrate
I would like to talk about a matter which might be important to many people who want to immigrate
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Avoid using the same word twice in a sentence.
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We say “a person who wants” and “people who want” because the word “people” refers to many.
I would like to discuss a topic that might be of interest to those who wish to immigrate.
I'd made a topic about It before , but no body replied on me in spite of it's importance , so I hope that you will enter and give us your opinion
I have made a topic about it before, but nobody replied despite its importance.
I have launched a similar thread previously but, despite its importance, I haven’t had any response. I hope that you will participate in the discussion this time around and express your opinion in that matter.